Subject: Self Introduction

Dear Professor Brad,

My name is Peh Zhi Wei and I am one of the student in your effective communication class group 4. I am writing this letter to introduce myself for you to know me better.
I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic with a Diploma in Mechanical Engineering in 2017. The reason why I studied mechanical engineer was due to the influence of my family members and the lack of passion and having no goals for my future. Hearing from my family members and research online, I came to a conclusion that I should study mechanical engineering as it is a very general course where I can keep my choice open and specialize in something that interest me in the future. Throughout my polytechnic learning experience and internship, this piqued my interest in mechanical engineering as I slowly get curious in how does an object mechanism works and make me realized that the world of engineering is huge and there are still a lot for us to uncover. Thus, I have applied to SIT to pursue the Bachelor of Engineering with Honours in Mechanical Engineer.

One of my weakness is that I am not good in presentation as I have issue trying to memorize my speech and being nervous which cause my mind to go blanks at times. However, I am very open to criticism as I believe that I have many shortcoming when it comes to presentation where I will try to improve based on feedback and reflection.
My goal for this module is to improve on my presentation skills such as body language skills and speech. I also hope to be able to communicate well with someone that I meet for the first time in the future such as my future interviewer or business partner.
Thank you for reading through my introduction and I look forward to attend your lessons and learn from you.

Best regards,
Peh Zhi Wei

Comments

  1. Brad BlackstoneJanuary 19, 2020 at 6:00 PM


    Dear Zhi Wei,

    Thanks very much for posting your letter. It's detailed and quite informative as you share about your interest in engineering, your comm skills experience and your module goals. I am certain this terms we can addres each of your amims and help you become a more effective communicator.

    Of course, this process begins now, and in this letter there are a few minor issues in terms of language use:

    1. grammar odds and ends
    -- I am one of the student > (one of many?)
    -- why I studied mechanical engineer > (odd phrasing)

    -- Throughout my polytechnic learning experience and internship, this piqued my interest in mechanical engineering... > (What piqued your interest?)
    -- in how does an object mechanism works > (word order) in how an object mechanism works
    -- make me realized > (wrong word form)
    -- Honours in Mechanical Engineer. > (correct word form?)
    -- One of my weakness > ?
    -- my mind to go blanks > ?
    -- many shortcoming > ?
    -- when it comes to presentation > ?

    2. subject-verb disagreement
    -- that interest me > ?
    -- there are still a lot > ?
    -- which cause > ?

    Let's work on these. See me if you have any questions.

    Cheers,

    Brad



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    1. fanJanuary 26, 2020 at 2:47 AM

      Dear Professor Brad,

      Thank you for your informative feedback and it is greatly appreciated. I believe I will be able to refine my introduction throughout with the feedbacks from you and my classmate. Thank you for your time on writing this constructive feedback and hope to learn more from you throughout this trimester.

      Best regards,
      Peh Zhi Wei

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    2. Brad BlackstoneJanuary 31, 2020 at 10:40 PM

      You're welcome, ZhiWei.

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  2. Norman TanJanuary 22, 2020 at 6:25 AM

    Hi Zhi Wei, I am Norman Tan from your class group 4.

    1) I felt that your letter would be better if you add in your interests or hobbies to allow us to know more about you.

    2) After studying mechanical engineering in polytechnic, why did u choose to study mechanical engineering again university instead of choosing a specific course such as robotics a more specialised mechanical engineering ?

    I enjoyed reading your introduction letter. I hope my observations will help you in some way and i look forward to learning in class together. Thank you.

    Best regards,
    Norman Tan

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    1. fanJanuary 29, 2020 at 2:42 AM


      Dear Norman Tan,

      Thank you for your informative feedback and it is greatly appreciated.
      For the first pointer, i do not have any specific hobby other than playing pool but it has been awhile since i last touched it though. As for the second point, Initially i applied for Mechatronic for SIT , however there is a change in the course and it was converted into Mechanical Engineering instead but i preferred to keep my choices more open to allow myself to absorb the knowledge and amplify my interest in engineering. Thank you for your time on writing this constructive feedback.

      Best regards,
      Peh Zhi Wei

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  3. HiLMiFebruary 2, 2020 at 7:51 PM

    Hi Zhi Wei, I am your classmate from the blog group

    1) From what Norman Tan said, it will be a great content to add in to your letter. Did any of your hobbies inspired you to be a mechanical engineer ?

    2) Any other goals you wish to achieve by the end of this course? Maybe something that will improve you personally

    Hope to hear from you soon!

    Cheers,
    Hilmi

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    1. fanFebruary 17, 2020 at 7:19 AM

      Dear Hilmi,

      Sorry for the delayed replies and thank you for your informative feedback and it is greatly appreciated. For the first pointers, my hobbies did not inspire me to be a mechanical engineer, however it does make me interested on the transfer of force between the balls, the angle the ball will go after hitting the cushion.

      For the second pointers, i would like to achieve a better writing skills and in overall, able to showcase myself well to the public and to a stranger.

      Thank you for your time on writing this constructive feedback and once again i apologize for the late replies.

      Best regards,
      Peh Zhi Wei

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